UCONCLUSIONU - REPEAT THE IDEA THAT WE CAN HELP PEOPLE BOTH AT HOME...

Last week I wrote a plan for the question below. Now you can read my full essay.

We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be

concerned with our own communities and countries.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that we should not help people in other countries as long as there

are problems in our own society. I disagree with this view because I believe that we

should try to help as many people as possible.

On the one hand, I accept that it is important to help our neighbours and fellow

citizens. In most communities there are people who are impoverished or

disadvantaged in some way. It is possible to find homeless people, for example, in

even the wealthiest of cities, and for those who are concerned about this problem,

there are usually opportunities to volunteer time or give money to support these

people. In the UK, people can help in a variety of ways, from donating clothing to

serving free food in a soup kitchen. As the problems are on our doorstep, and there are

obvious ways to help, I can understand why some people feel that we should prioritise

local charity.

At the same time, I believe that we have an obligation to help those who live beyond

our national borders. In some countries the problems that people face are much more

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serious than those in our own communities, and it is often even easier to help. For

example, when children are dying from curable diseases in African countries,

governments and individuals in richer countries can save lives simply by paying for

vaccines that already exist. A small donation to an international charity might have a

much greater impact than helping in our local area.

In conclusion, it is true that we cannot help everyone, but in my opinion national

boundaries should not stop us from helping those who are in need.

(280 words, band 9)

If the question asks you to explain a problem related to the environment, you could

write about global warming.

Here is a paragraph explaining the problem (causes) of global warming:

Perhaps the most serious problem facing the environment is global warming. Gases

such as carbon dioxide trap heat from the sun within the earth’s atmosphere, and this

causes global temperatures to rise. This process is known as the greenhouse effect,

and human activity is a major factor in the rise of the greenhouse gases which cause

it. For example, factories and vehicles produce emissions and exhaust fumes. As

many developing countries are becoming industrialised, emissions from factories are

expected to increase. Furthermore, the number of cars on our streets is growing all the

time, and cheap air travel is making flying accessible to more and more people.

Consequently, the amount of greenhouse gases released into the atmosphere shows no

signs of decreasing.

You can learn a lot from this paragraph if you analyse it: