4. "From a personal point of view,..."
Finally, we wrote a good paragraph together:
Zoos have several benefits. The main benefit is that zoos play an important role in
wildlife conservation. They help to protect endangered species, such as pandas or
rhinos, and allow scientists to study animal behaviour. Another advantage of zoos is
that they employ large numbers of people, therefore providing job opportunities and
income for the local area. Also, the money that zoos make can be used for
conservation projects. From a personal point of view, zoos are interesting, educational
and fun. They are entertaining for families, and teach children to appreciate wildlife
and nature.
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Childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many countries. Explain the
main causes and effects of this problem, and suggest some possible solutions.
Here are some vocabulary ideas for this topic. (My students: this is your homework!)
My students have been working on last Saturday's exam question:
Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a
successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after
school.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
We did some brainstorming and some internet research to get ideas, then we planned
the essay. We did the introduction, first sentence of each paragraph and conclusion
together. Here is the simple structure that my students are using to write the essay:
Introduction
When they finish school, teenagers face the dilemma of whether to get a job or
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continue their education. While there are some benefits to getting a job straight after
school, I would argue that it is better to go to college or university.
Paragraph 1: benefits of getting a job
The option to start work straight after school is attractive for several reasons.
(IDEAS: start earning money, become independent, gain experience, learn skills, get
promotions, settle down earlier, afford a house, have a family)
Paragraph 2: benefits of higher education (my opinion)
On the other hand, I believe that it is more beneficial for students to continue their
studies.
(IDEAS: some jobs require academic qualifications, better job opportunities, higher
salaries, the job market is very competitive, gain knowledge, become a useful member
of society)
Conclusion
For the reasons mentioned above, it seems to me that students are more likely to be
successful in their lives if they continue their studies beyond school level.
Last week I gave you a simple structure and some ideas for the task 2 question below.
Here's my example of a good essay (higher than band 7).
The option to start work straight after school is attractive for several reasons. Many
young people want to start earning money as soon as possible. In this way, they can
become independent, and they will be able to afford their own house or start a family.
In terms of their career, young people who decide to find work, rather than continue
their studies, may progress more quickly. They will have the chance to gain real
experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen profession. This may lead
to promotions and a successful career.
studies. Firstly, academic qualifications are required in many professions. For
example, it is impossible to become a doctor, teacher or lawyer without having the
relevant degree. As a result, university graduates have access to more and better job
opportunities, and they tend to earn higher salaries than those with fewer
qualifications. Secondly, the job market is becoming increasingly competitive, and
sometimes there are hundreds of applicants for one position in a company. Young
people who do not have qualifications from a university or college will not be able to
compete.
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successful in their careers if they continue their studies beyond school level.
(271 words)
Today I'm going to write a paragraph about gun control. I'll start with some
vocabulary ideas, then I'll make them into full sentences.
Ideas: why should the ownership of guns be limited/controlled?
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